Lowell Grand Banks Dory by MBerg - Model Shipways - 1:24

[MBerg]

Pre-Log

 

My first kit arrived yesterday. Not the greatest timing since I have a lot going on, but I decided to check things out tonight. I got a little temporary work space set up tonight, and since I have a biopsy early in the morning tomorrow, I didn't get into anything serious.

 

I did open it up and took inventory of all the parts & tools, and started reading into the instruction book. I've been eagerly awaiting this since I ordered it sometime last week. I'll also be getting an OcCre Polaris expecting tomorrow which will come with a cutting board and some other tools this Dory kit didn't come with so I should be in a good spot to start.

 

I'm very excited and a little nervous to get into it, but my mind is a little occupied with my procedure tomorrow. I'll be pretty drugged up; but if it wears off quick enough I may be able to take the first step or two tomorrow evening. If not, I expect to get into it Thursday.

 

I'm not going to list them all, but I appreciate all the other build logs I've read through, they've been incredibly helpful. I may have gotten a little obsessive about going through them and psyched myself out a little bit when it comes to certain steps though! That may not be a terrible thing since I'll be extra aware of common issues. I'm already starting to remind myself that this is my first model and is not going to be perfect, however I still like to take care in what I do.

 

 

Edited Tuesday at 02:14 AM by MBerg
Fumble fingers

[robert952]

Hopping on board this build log. 

 

The first model you build is fun and exciting. And it can be a bit scary. But don't fret. You'll do fine.

 

Take your time and enjoy the experience. You will learn a lot during the process.

 

And, if you've read a lot of builds, in just about every one are "I'm not entirely pleased with..." or "if I were to do this again, I do it...."  comments. However, at the end of the build you will also see, 'I am pleased with what I built" type comments, too.  

 

The latter statement should be the goal. The former shows the learning process. 

 

Don't forget,  you have a bunch of people here willing to help out with that learning process. Just ask. 

 

Good luck and have fun. 

 

[Frank Burroughs]

The dory is going to be my first wooden kit come Monday.  The purchase came with a sailing pram and a lobster boat.  The dory will be fun to make!  Looking forward to your progress.

[MBerg]

Log #1

 

I managed to get into it last night and plan to do a bit more today, but I'll start with updating where I left off.

 

Progress is slower than I expected, but I'm taking my time and don't have a real permanent setup yet. I don't have an issue with how long it's taking, I'm just enjoying myself.

 

The wife let me take apart a framed picture (not the wedding photo though) and pull the glass out to use for the build so at least I have some sort of basic cutting surface to get started. I kinda had to get used to cutting the pieces out and was working with a mix between scoring, sawing and putting pressure until they popped. I'm not sure what the typical method is, but at least it worked. I found sanding on the glass a bit tricky as the wood sort of 'stuck' to it, so I ended up holding the wood and moving the sanding stick.

 

They give you a solid bottom to start with or three separate pieces that you can choose to glue together. I opted for the three planks and will save the solid piece as a backup or scrap. After gluing, the bottom didn't end up being perfectly flat, I noticed some of the wood had slight curves while assembling. I tried holding down the parts with my hands for a minute, but at the same time was trying to clean up the glue. It ended up being a little messy between two of the boards as I guess I waited too long and/or didn't use enough water. I probably could've used a wetter brush, but I was concerned about diluting the glue too much so I was pretty conservative. Obviously this will be something that practice will help get a feel for.

 

I had a thought about practicing disassembly and re-gluing, but decided against it, I don't think it will affect the end result too much.

 

Once that dried, I added the cleats. This part took a little while. I had to get used to measuring and cutting the wood with what I had and basically just lined up the wood with the etching on the bottom board, then marked it with a mechanical pencil and worked my way through it with the X-Acto.

 

The instructions/history lesson talked about boats not having 90 degree angles to a void injury, etc. Makes sense, I'm in manufacturing, we do the same thing so I took extra time to chamfer all four top edges of the slats. I also tapered the sides of the first and last to conform to the shape of the hull a little bit as well. It's such a tiny detail, I highly doubt anyone without a magnifying glass will see it, but at least I'll know it's there!

 

 

As mentioned, I have an extra recovery day today so I should be able to get another post in with some more progress. I'm a little nervous about getting the transom and stem on straight and lining up the planks as these are common issues. Hopefully it goes smoothly, but even if it doesn't you learn more from mistakes and corrections than you do from everything going perfect! Which reminds me of deciding to start with this 'beginner' boat and not thinking much of it, but after reading others logs, and starting it myself, this boat is really growing on me and I'm very excited to continue building it.

 

Thanks for letting me know, I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your logs @Frank Burroughs

18 hours ago, robert952 said:

However, at the end of the build you will also see, 'I am pleased with what I built" type comments, too.

Agreed! Had I have started this 10-20 years ago I'd probably be way more worked up about getting every detail just perfect the very first time. Over the years, I've learned to make my perfectionist side take a back seat, it's a lot more calming that way. I know I'll be happy with the end result no matter how it goes - even if it goes terribly, terribly wrong, it's fairly cheap to order a replacement kit. Thanks for the comments and following along.

Edited April 25 by MBerg

[MBerg]

Log #2

 

Attaching the stem and transom. Things are getting a bit wonky.

 

Side note: I was expecting the shipment from OcCre to show up yesterday with a different set of tools & cutting mat. Seems the goofballs at FedEx sent it to France to sit there for a day and a half, then when it landed on this side of the pond, it ended up in NJ instead of Canada. I figured maybe they'd get it to Canada by morning and deliver today, but seems it sat there for 12 hours then shipped south to Tennessee! I can only imagine it's being loaded onto a flight north - hoping it shows up tomorrow - two days late. I'm a little eager to get the extra tools, but I'm definitely having fun with what I have.

 

I didn't realize how time consuming cleaning up all the tiny parts would be. If I can somehow replicate a 1:24 version of myself it may be a bit easier holding them. I'm sure things will be easier once tools, proper wood stations and a hodgepodge of improvised sanding sticks, blocks and sponges are acquired. For now I'm making do by doing with the sanding stick and some extra sandpaper. I found wrapping it around the X-Acto handle works okay for some of the curves, but I'll definitely need something a little better.

 

The instructions suggested using a square edge or right angled wood block. The square I have didn't quite work so I found an old block in the garage, checked the ensure it was square and went to town. The stem went on fairly smoothly. I don't know what I did with the transom knee, but the transom ended up sitting ridiculously crooked (Good thing I dry fit first!). I couldn't use the right angle block / sanding stick combo anymore since I already glued the transom to the knee and cleat so I ended up eyeballing it flat. That part freaked me out a bit, but I'm happy with the end result after doing it by hand.

 

On top of that, I also noticed that not only was there a bit of a side to side rock in the bottom as mentioned in Log #1 - there is also a 'twist' to the whole thing. I'm not sure how I didn't realize that yesterday. It's fairly minimal and I decided to keep moving along as it may flatten out a little when putting the rock in the bottom on the next step; Aside from that, I'll do the best I can to keep things straight when framing & planking (fingers crossed). In any case, I now have something getting a little less like a surfboard and slightly more like a boat.

 

 

I finished up by wetting the bottom, laying spacers under each end and placing a stone weight in the middle. The instructions called for 1/8" spacers. I used the frame spacers (1/16" each) and double stacked them on each end note: do not do this if you plan to assemble the frames while this sits as you'll only have 1 spacer. Now to let it dry. The next steps involve the building board and frames which I may start on later tonight.

 

 

 

Edited April 26 by MBerg
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[druxey]

Any remaining twist should correct itself once the building board and frames are put together with the bottom boards added.

[MBerg]

Log #3

 

Redoing a couple frame assemblies.

 

I noticed, like others, that the instruction book isn't printed to scale so the frame template doesn't quite line up. With that, I downloaded the PDF and printed it out myself. Had I been at the office this week, I would've used our plotter. Since I'm at home, I had to mess with the settings and the best I got was a hybrid between two pages (since the PDF doesn't have the template as its own separate page). It worked, but you can see in the pic the bottoms of 1, 3, 5 are cut off.

 

 

I left these to dry just before I went to bed. Well, subconsciously I must've really wanted to take something apart. In the morning, I noticed a couple of the frames were glues very cooked. Assemblies 3 and 5 shown below were the worst.

 

 

I assembled them into the building board and thought about moving ahead, but decided to redo these two frames - they're now soaking in alcohol.

 

In hindsight, Since the template I printed had the bottom cut off, I feel this contributed to me not lining these two frames up right. They were also the first two frames I put together. For whatever reason, I was more focused on the right angles where they meet the building cross piece than I was making sure the two pieces of frame were flush where they meet. Ultimately, my decision to redo was based on:

• Aside from #3, these are to have bevels sanded on them - having them so uneven will create a pretty sloppy, staggered bevel.
• The char isn't a great gluing surface and a lot of it wouldn't be removed when beveling which could compromise the strength and lead to unforeseen issues later.
• Even though the worst part will be hidden when glued to the rest of the boat, the frames wouldn't be at the correct angle and are closer together than they should be. I didn't want to risk this creating excessive gaps and bends when planking.

I'm expecting to get the frames reassembled soon, but I'm playing catch-up with work today, and the wife's birthday is tomorrow so I'll have to play the rest of it by ear.

 

Thank you, druxey for the peace of mind. This also led to my decision to err on the side of caution to redo the frames since they'll directly affect the shape of the bottom board.

[MBerg]

Very brief update: I just took apart and cleaned up the two frames. Having a bit of experience doing this will no doubt help in the future. Soaking them in a closed container with 95% alcohol for an hour then gently wiggling them apart. I used tweeters and a blade to separate the frames. It worked great, and just needed a bit of scraping to get the rubbery glue residue off. 👍

[davec]

Your making great progress and your model is coming out really well.  As to "I didn't realize how time consuming cleaning up all the tiny parts would be,"  cleaning laser char seems to be an acquired skill.  A lot of people here seem to have gotten really good at it (the logs of Chuck Passaro's new Speedwell kit are amazing).  I've been working on the Dory, but cutting the parts out of a different kind of wood with the plan to not paint or stain.  It hasn't been a time saver over cleaning up kit parts. Debonding is definitely a really important skill.    I'll be following along.

 

Dave

[MBerg]

3 hours ago, davec said:

I've been working on the Dory, but cutting the parts out of a different kind of wood with the plan to not paint or stain.

Very interesting, thanks for the heads up, I'll be following yours as well. Funny, I'm already thinking about such things - my wife has a craft cutter so I was just asking if it could cut wood. I have a few years experience with both 3D and 2D CAD as well. Might be handy one day.

 

I skimmed a bit of Chucks Speedwell post and will definitely be going back, very impressive.

 

3 hours ago, davec said:

Your making great progress and your model is coming out really well.

Appreciate it.

[druxey]

It was a good decision to reglue those frames now. If you hadn't, it would be guaranteed to come back and bite you later!

[MBerg]

Log #4

 

Almost perfect.

 

Frames re-glued and set in building board with transom holder. A couple were loose so I brushed a bit of water and they tightened right up.

 

Next steps are to bevel them, three at a time. This took a while and sounded terrible on the top - like squeaking. I imagine it's because that char was gunking up my sanding stick incredibly fast. I ended up cutting some strips of 150 grit and holding them on top of the sanding stick as a temporary renewal. I ended up needing to move this step over to my computer desk since the current work area has drawers that don't allow me to clap the building board down. It took a while, but ended up nicely. I sanded a bit more after the pics and also remembered some comments in other build logs about sawdust and glue as a filler so I decided to start collecting the built up dust from this step.

 

 

Once I was feeling good about it, I did a dry fit with the bottom board. By the time I slid the transom in tightly and looked over to guide the stem in, it was already seated. Everything went together and lined up perfectly, I was shocked. The whole fit could not have felt better, the time lining everything up, sanding, beveling, re-gluing some frames paid off. I was pretty damn proud of it. I thoroughly inspected the whole thing, made sure the frames were centered, vertical, the transom and or stem didn't have twists in them. I barely had to adjust anything.

 

 

 

I've been dealing with some health issues which are making me feel incredibly drained and just a sense of malaise. I was exhausted and ready for bed, but was excited to keep going. I removed the board, glued up the bottom of the frames and reassembled. It went together just as smoothly as the first time. I did a quick once over, and added the elastic bands. I then started cleaning up the glue. This is something I need to get a hang of. I either need to be faster, use more water or be more aggressive, but the glue seems hard to deal with at times - it's also awkward angles on this assembly. I managed to smooth or remove any excess glue.

 

 

Then... whoops; #2 frame is not perfectly vertical. Actually a couple of them are ever so slightly slanted. The glue must've contacted and shifted a couple while I was seating the transom. I removed some bands and tried to lightly pry #2 up, shift it over and glue again; however, it wouldn't budge. I'm sure I could've forced it off, but it was late, I was feeling rough and didn't want to make things worse by breaking something. Wife's birthday tomorrow - I go to bed.

 

I get back to it now, and am trying to assess whether or not I should attempt to re-glue. After removing the bands, it doesn't look as bad, but still has a slant. I think I will put this decision off for a bit longer and work on beveling the garboard.

[MBerg]

Last night I spent some time practicing the rolling bevel on the garboard plank, sanding the transom and stem. 

 

The OcCre kit showed up on Friday and it had a sanding block in it with various angles and curves. There was a little triangular piece that I used for the plank. What a godsend that was. I should've done something like that sooner. Having a better variation of sanding tools will be a huge help. 

 

I throughly enjoyed sanding the stem, transom, planks, etc. It was very satisfying smoothing and refining the wood. Since I went into this hobby not knowing if it'll stick, that was a good sign. 

 

The wife had to go into town today so I tagged along and we stopped by Michael's. Unfortunately they've revamped, and don't carry any of the wood, or modeling stuff like they used to, but I got my hands on a 50 percent off x-acto kit with multiple different blade types, some #11 replacement blades and some acrylic stain and wash, and a better quality brush, all on clearance for about 70 percent off. I was hoping to get a small square, more sandpaper, some other adhesives, but it was all only online. I was thinking of making a little lobster trap to either go with this boat or the lobster smack when I get to it. Looks like I'll need to get most things online. 

 

I've pretty well decided I'm going to leave the frames as is and hope to get to fitting the planks soon. 

Edited April 28 by MBerg
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[druxey]

Two points: One, if you aren't happy with something now, you won't be happy with it later! Two, use rubbing alcohol not only to debond, but also to soften and remove any residual glue squeeze-out later, if you missed a bit.

 

Glad that you are enjoying the experience and the challenge.

[MBerg]

3 hours ago, druxey said:

if you aren't happy with something now, you won't be happy with it later!

Ah yes, of course, I do know you're right - I maybe just didn't want to admit it!

 

I read this earlier and you made me started to re-think, I know part of my decision factor to not redo was to avoid making something else worse. I just got back to take a second look at the model now - it actually looks quite good and after checking it with a square block that I didn't have before, and looking at it from many angles. I'm starting to really think it's a very slight angle, mixed with a trick of the eye since the port and starboard frames are staggered. Plus all the other curves and bends and being upside down. I now truly think it will look good once it's planked and released from the building board.

 

I do appreciate your comment, I feel much better about my decision after another look. Also, noted on the alcohol to clean up later.

 

As a build related side note for myself or anyone coming across this later: The instructions for the garboard state the rolling bevel should end in a 45 degree angle.

First; I didn't notice until now, but the rest of the bevel does not call for a 45 degree (makes sense since it would be impossible to have both middle and ends as a 45 degree since the etch lines are the same depth.

Second; between WP1470-E & WP1470-F (AKA, the two basswood sheets that contain all planking) the etching you're supposed to follow to create the bevel across the entire length of the board is much narrower on one set of planks than it is on the other. I'm betting this is contributing to some builds ending up with uneven sheer planks since one side would overlap less than the other. I'll have to keep this in mind as I work through them. Those crazies over at Model Shipways trying to throw some curve-balls at us beginners!

 

[MBerg]

Adding a couple more pictures of the second plank sheet and garboard itself. It's not just the etching that has an issue - the cut lines don't line up on either side of the tab. I tried my best to cut it out as straight as possible. I'll need to think of how I can keep any potential issues to a minimum - might be making use of some wood filler soon if it gets out of hand! I'm now wondering if this entire sheet was a defect since I don't recall seeing this in any other build logs. Any thoughts on how to mitigate would be appreciated.

 

[SiriusVoyager]

That definitely doesn't look right.  The laser cuts should line up almost perfectly.  I would contact model ship world and ask them to send a replacement.  They were pretty quick to respond when I had a missing part.

[MBerg]

1 hour ago, SiriusVoyager said:

I would contact model ship world and ask them to send a replacement.

Will do. Lets see what they say. I figure worst case, most of it will be hidden by the other board on the outside, but it'll be difficult to cover up on the inside. I also have no idea what issues could compound from using these board either.

 

Log #5

 

I decided to go ahead and start bending the 'good' garboard. I clamped it up, but something didn't seem right - it was too short and the cut angle didn't seem to ride up the stem very straight.

 

I left it for a few minutes but my gut was telling me I needed to deal with this now, not when I'm ready to glue. I took it off and tried fitting it again. This time I overlapped the bottom board quite a bit more and it fit 10x better. I still wanted to make sure everything else appeared right. I noted a bit of a 'pucker' around where it met the stem.

 

 

It looked like the stem needed more sanding. I removed the board a second time and sanded the stem down more. I also decided to hit the frames a bit more. Then after some finger fumbling with the clamps and elastics it'll sit like this overnight.

 

 

Whew, into the part that I've been most anticipating as it's the most unfamiliar. Exciting to start the planking. I'm not new to bending wood as I've made a bow before (that's "bow and arrow" bow), but I've never done it with water, or without shaving significant amounts of wood and 'teaching' it to bend over days.

 

We'll see how it goes with Model Expo. I can always work on the paddles, or the OcCre Polaris if it'll be a week or so.

[MBerg]

No direct response from Model Expo, but it seems they opened up an order for a replacement sheet since I got a notification this morning. 👍 Good, but also means I'll be putting the planking on hold until that arrives.

 

Log #6

 

A small update and some notes for later. I may not post much until I get replacements.

 

After messing around I was able to get the plank glued in place. That's some tricky clamping to figure out. I grabbed some bobby pins. Thanks to @JacquesCousteau for that idea; yours was one of, if not my favorite dory build logs.

 

I find caution is needed when using those metal clamps as they're pretty aggressive. The bobby pins aren't quite aggressive enough. My mind is thinking of all sorts of ways to clamp in the future (yes, it's only a bobby pin holding the plank to the step). For this, I collected some extra elastics, bobby pins, and cut up some card stock to combine with scrap wood.

 

Elastics were a pain since they're all different sizes. It'll be best to pick up a few different strengths that can quickly be identified. I mitigated the denting as best I could, but was less concerned with the parts of the frame that will be covered by the seat risers, thwarts, etc. I will correct as best as possible with water after.

 

I was trying to fill some of the gaps with glue/water mix as per instructions, but it didn't work too well. Some gaps were a little larger than I liked, and I wasn't able to close them up with available clamping. I ended up putting on a 5 minute song and holding 4 or 5 spots with my fingers to close the gaps. By the time I let go they were all closed up and pretty solid. 👍

 

Some thoughts for the future:

• Alligator clips, heavy duty paper/binder clips.
• I may try gluing some card stock to the inside of some clips which should help create a softer clamping surface.
• For the second plank, I may try cutting some elastics, which can be routed through ignoring the building board. They'll only contact the planks and bottom board and then can be tied as loosely or as tightly as needed. Having elastics right around the planks could push it the wrong way so I may try adding some spacers on the inside of the boat to keep that from happening. We'll see how bored I get while waiting for the other planks to arrive.
• Thinking of creating a crude gauge to help set the height of the second board the same as the first.

 

I swear, the glue doesn't look that messy in person. I guess I have some cleaning up to do.

 

 

[druxey]

Use just one elastic band per frame, over the frame. Use a small piece of scrap under it as necessary. If the plank is wet bent, it really shouldn't need a lot of force to hold it in place.

[JacquesCousteau]

Glad to hear my build log was helpful! It looks like you're doing a great job. I found that sometimes two bobby pins worked best.

[SiriusVoyager]

Double check the instructions.  It probably said glue and sawdust mix to fill gaps.  I learned about that trick from this kit as well, and it worked fairly well for me when I had a gap that also needed to be bonded.

[MBerg]

On 4/30/2024 at 8:50 PM, druxey said:

Use just one elastic band per frame, over the frame. Use a small piece of scrap under it as necessary. If the plank is wet bent, it really shouldn't need a lot of force to hold it in place

Noted. When I unclamped I noted frame #1 was actually pushing it out ever so slightly. I now know it was a mistake to push some of the gaps between the frames in because I caused a bit of an indent just beside frame #1. I'm not entirely sure if I should attempt to fix and if so, how. I may try to sand the high spot down a bit to even it all out.

 

On 4/30/2024 at 10:10 PM, JacquesCousteau said:

Glad to hear my build log was helpful! It looks like you're doing a great job. I found that sometimes two bobby pins worked best.

 

Thank you! and thanks for the tip. I picked up some 1" wood clothes pins that I think will help in the future as well. I realized I never finished your log, and what a coincidence, you made a lobster trap. I was thinking of making one of those. I may dm you for some questions if you don't mind!

 

On 5/1/2024 at 9:16 PM, SiriusVoyager said:

It probably said glue and sawdust mix to fill gaps.

 

Maybe a typo? 🤷‍♂️

 

 

I'm still waiting on the replacement sheet. Working on the ores. 2 down, 2 to go. I'll post pics when I'm done. I was hoping for the other plank sheet today, but looks like it won't be arriving. Depending on how much time I have, I have have to crack into the Polaris this weekend.

 

 

Edited Friday at 10:19 PM by MBerg

[JacquesCousteau]

Having now made two lobster traps (one of which is shown somewhere in the Canoa de Rancho long), I would be happy to try to answer any questions you have about them!

[MBerg]

Log #7

 

Since the planking is on hold, I moved all production onto the oars and got them completed over the last couple days. That was a heck of a lot more work than I was expecting... I found the sheet that came on was excessively thick so there was loads of material to remove.

 

Making these is fairly straight-forward, and there's probably not a whole lot of different ways to skin this cat, but I'll make a novel about it anyways.

 

After cleaning up some char (not all - mainly the handle and tip of the blade) I started with some 100 grit paper and put finger pressure just where the loom/body/shaft meets the blade. I found this worked quite well to take off some extra material at the low end of the shaft and a nice taper through to the end. I adjusted my finger location as necessary while constantly checking progress. I then moved to 200 grit as I got close to the desired shape and thickness.

 

Once I had a good rough of the blade, I whittled the shaft down to create a more rounded shape, then went to town with 150grit paper. I would say I ended up with a slightly more oval, then round shape, but that's not a big deal.

 

After the shaft and blades were looking good, I kind of chisel, chopped, sliced out bits of the handle to make it as round as possible. I think I did this differently on each one! I did find that placing it on the edge of a cutting mat (glass in my case) and cutting it length/grain wise after scoring it in from the side worked quite well. I would also note that I put in a new blade after the first two and the remaining two felt much better to handle these precise cuts.

 

I then took a small triangular block with 220 grit wrapped around it and smoothed the handles down as well as the rest of the blades edges until I was satisfied. I was incredibly happy with the end result!

 

 

Hang on. There's an optional step, or if you're like me; a mandatory step - adding some 'leather' wear strips. I grabbed some brown wrapping paper and cut a rectangular sheet out, wrapped it around an oar to roughly measure the circumference, and cut it down. I was going for 1/4" strips, so I cut one out that I could use as a template to cut the other 4. I tried to do all 4 at once after separating them into individual pieces; this did not work well. I ended up cutting one by one. I found this fairly challenging working with such tiny pieces of paper, but tweezers and a very sharp blade came in handy. The end result after cleaning up the miscuts and shifting pieces, I probably ended up with 3/16" strips. Perfect - instructions say 1/8" - 1/4", split the difference.

 

Now, once again the instructions have a scaled section that's not to scale so I went and printed this page from the PDF. Probably overkill, but I like to be a little more accurate than a little less. A small brush with some glue and tweezers to hold the paper down worked nicely. Once there was enough glue on the paper, I placed the oar on top and rolled it a bit to curl the paper around until one end stuck. I then used my fingers to wrap the rest of it around, making sure it went straight and any excess glue went on my fingers or on the paper - done. These will make a fine edition once the boat is complete.

 

 

As for the sheet of replacement planks. I haven't been given tracking or anything so I'm not sure when they will show up. Though I fully expect they'll get here long before next weekend. On top of that, I have an incredibly busy work week ahead of me, and then the wife and I are heading to see Les Miserables in Toronto on Friday evening. I was thinking of working ahead and prepping some parts, but I decided I want to stick with the sequence for this build and take my time working on each step purposefully as it's being completed. So with that, this build is on hold until further notice.

Edited 21 hours ago by MBerg
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